My angel above my shoulder,
My angel above my head.
My angel by my window,
My angel above my bed.
My angel never leaves me,
Guarding me as she clings.
She's watching over my life,
Holding me under her wing.
My angel is my protector
That God's sent from above.
She brings my life much kindness,
Never shows a lack thereof.
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you did a great job throughout the poem and I'm glad I could review it.
p.s.
Please dont take this personally!! I loved your poem!! You can keep it the same and I would be happy.
Eep, okay I'm a little reluctant to review this
but I will anyway. I'm gonna be a little techincal so brace yourself.
I'm just reading this but I am getting a picture of 4 angels all around this person. I'm just saying, it seems like, the way you describe it, there is more than on of these angels.
Clings? Not the best word here, unless her wings are broken and she's fluttering helplessly. And also you don't specify what she is clinging to, therefore, I think it sounds odd and out of place. In the last line I think you mean wing
Other than the clingyness I really like this stanza.
Okay we know your angel is guarding you. You said that in the previous stanza so you son't have to say guardian, maybe say protector?
Hope I helped.
~peanut~